I don't really have a point, here

[yvannairie]

I compromised on wanting to write and wanting to read by rereading Half A Mind again.

I truly am my own biggest fan.

With some hindsight I feel like the structure leaves something to be desired -- I keep both of them talking so much that it doesn't exactly drag, but there's still something. Hmm. Something about it that I can't quite put my finger on. It feels sort of floaty and time-independent and I'm not sure I like that about it that much.

The character voices could always be stronger but that's just b/c I'm constantly improving on how I understand these characters -- poor Bulkhead's dialogue suffers from the fic being very heavy on his thoughts, I honestly just failed to pay as much attention as I should have, but it's okay, I still think he sounds very loveable and very attentive, the way he should. It might also be that he just read so much more frank compared to Wheeljack's constant, incessant pointy opinionatedness.

Overall, though, it's still very good. Or, well, good is relative but I really like it, I'm definitely onto something here and even as I struggle to really find my groove with the follow-ups, it stands on its own. It doesn't sound incomplete -- the whole point of the story is to... I guess negotiate an understanding about where they're at with each other, with the war, with the future, not necessarily make grand sweeping plans about it.

I think I might just be frustrated because I know what comes next, but I have no way of working out how Half A Mind might lay the foundation for stories that haven't been written yet, pretty much.