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yvannairie) wrote2019-07-04 05:57 pm
yvannairie) wrote2019-07-04 05:57 pm
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(I also thought about OCs a whole bunch so yaaay productivity)
Ohhh I think I worked out what my problem with the Half A Mind sequel has been.
I haven't really properly established how these characters get so much said with the little they have time for, and if it's even a problem that they need to take their time when talking and aren't having a lot of that, yet.
Solution -- write the "flirting with guns" thing, as it's set way before they developed their rapport and are both adorably tongue-tied around each other, and also scrap basically the entire first scene and rework the dynamic to be less mutually confused and more just frustrated and filled with a lot of "just so we're both clear -- you're still cool with this?"
(Duck, but this week has been long.)
I haven't really properly established how these characters get so much said with the little they have time for, and if it's even a problem that they need to take their time when talking and aren't having a lot of that, yet.
Solution -- write the "flirting with guns" thing, as it's set way before they developed their rapport and are both adorably tongue-tied around each other, and also scrap basically the entire first scene and rework the dynamic to be less mutually confused and more just frustrated and filled with a lot of "just so we're both clear -- you're still cool with this?"
(Duck, but this week has been long.)